Friday, December 9, 2011

#FridayFlash - Six Winds

Grand Chancellor Harkott gave a small cry when his majordomo burst into the room. Pressing a lace handkerchief to his lips, Harkott tried to calm himself. "An update?"

The majordomo lowered his eyes, wringing his hands together. "It's the Six Winds, Sire. They're here."

"Say it isn't so," Harkott whimpered, collapsing into a delicate chair. "Not...not them."

"I wish it were otherwise."

The grand chancellor blotted at the sheen of sweat on his brow. "Are the praetorians making any difference?"

"Not in the least."

"They're just singers," he complained. "Just bards. Bards can't do this."

"Bards are neutral. But they-" The majordomo wet to the window, but the view quickly made him pull away. "That celestial diva has them all entranced."

Grand Chancellor Harkott sobbed and bit his rouged lower lip. "They can't be killers. This isn't possible." His bladder threatened to drain. "I've done nothing to deserve their attention."

Outside, the dragon leader of Six Winds roared, his voice enhancing that of the diva's. Walls shook beneath the auditory onslaught. Both men covered their ears and cringed in pain.

"No escape," the diva sang out. "Death to betrayers of Balance." Harkott whimpered as his bladder let go. The chill of death accompanied her song, and the grand chancellor felt the end of his days.

10 comments:

  1. This had sort of a bridge-of-the-ship-in-anime feel. Was that intentional, or did I project?

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  2. John, I got the same impression actually. Interesting way to bring Star Trek to fantasy :)

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  3. I also felt the anime feel, but a good thing, it's the kind of stuff I like.

    They would definitely give the big bad wolf a run for his money!

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  4. Fabulous description of setting throughout, not too much. It was delicately dropped in. I enjoyed this, thanks.

    Take care,
    JC

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  5. Death by song! Nice sketch of the world, I could almost see the clouds hanging ominous over the turret where Harkott cowered away the last few moments of his unbalanced life…

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  6. You know I sorta got the image of the Diva in Fifth Element here... I like the idea of death by song, very visual piece with an air of sci fi

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  7. Since we're comparing other works that this evoked, it left me with a feeling of something similar to Pullman's "His Dark Materials" series.

    Nice job, Raven. This had a great feel to it.

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  8. nice opinion, thanks for sharing...

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  9. You always manage to give just enough of a hint of backstory to pull these tales together.

    One typo - I'm guessing the majordomo went to the window, as opposed to wet?

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  10. Raven,

    Just wanted to say that you did an excellent job establishing the mood that went with the setting quickly and with very few words.

    I thought it was very well done!

    All the best,
    Paul

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